乐水嘉州 发表于 2008-10-29 13:00

[原创]河水变得清澈透明（晨泳叙事）

<P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4><STRONG><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Times New Roman; mso-hansi-font-family: Times New Roman">河水变得清澈透明（晨泳叙事）</SPAN><SPAN lang=EN-US style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-com:office:office" /><o:p></o:p></SPAN></STRONG></FONT></P><P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><SPAN lang=EN-US style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p><FONT size=4><STRONG>&nbsp;</STRONG></FONT></o:p></SPAN></P><P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4><STRONG><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Times New Roman; mso-hansi-font-family: Times New Roman">霜降六日</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"> </SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Times New Roman; mso-hansi-font-family: Times New Roman">感冒了</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"> </SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Times New Roman; 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FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Times New Roman; mso-hansi-font-family: Times New Roman">早起的泳人</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"> </SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Times New Roman; mso-hansi-font-family: Times New Roman">回旋在起落的河流</SPAN><SPAN lang=EN-US style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></SPAN></STRONG></FONT></P><P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4><STRONG><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Times New Roman; mso-hansi-font-family: Times New Roman">潇潇雨晨</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"> </SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Times New Roman; mso-hansi-font-family: Times New Roman">朦胧水岸之美……</SPAN><SPAN lang=EN-US style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></SPAN></STRONG></FONT></P><P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><SPAN lang=EN-US style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p><FONT size=4><STRONG>&nbsp;</STRONG></FONT></o:p></SPAN></P><P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4><STRONG><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Times New Roman; mso-hansi-font-family: Times New Roman">走下古城墙</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"> </SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Times New Roman; mso-hansi-font-family: Times New Roman">在育贤门外大吼高歌</SPAN><SPAN lang=EN-US style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></SPAN></STRONG></FONT></P><P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4><STRONG><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Times New Roman; mso-hansi-font-family: Times New Roman">跃入湍急的河流</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"> </SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Times New Roman; mso-hansi-font-family: Times New Roman">冲向对岸沙洲</SPAN><SPAN lang=EN-US style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></SPAN></STRONG></FONT></P><P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4><STRONG><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Times New Roman; mso-hansi-font-family: Times New Roman">感冒疼痛在活泼的浪涌中水遁</SPAN><SPAN lang=EN-US style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></SPAN></STRONG></FONT></P><P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4><STRONG><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Times New Roman; mso-hansi-font-family: Times New Roman">伊人</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"> </SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Times New Roman; mso-hansi-font-family: Times New Roman">秋风秋雨的清晨空气清新</SPAN><SPAN lang=EN-US style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></SPAN></STRONG></FONT></P><P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4><STRONG><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Times New Roman; mso-hansi-font-family: Times New Roman">快来啊</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"> </SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Times New Roman; mso-hansi-font-family: Times New Roman">河水已变得清澈透明……</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"> <SPAN lang=EN-US><o:p></o:p></SPAN></SPAN></STRONG></FONT></P><P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><SPAN lang=EN-US style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p><FONT size=4><STRONG>&nbsp;</STRONG></FONT></o:p></SPAN></P><P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><SPAN lang=EN-US style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><FONT size=4><STRONG>2008.10.29.<o:p></o:p></STRONG></FONT></SPAN></P><P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><SPAN lang=EN-US style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p><FONT size=4><STRONG>&nbsp;</STRONG></FONT></o:p></SPAN></P>

恐龙 发表于 2008-10-30 08:24

<P>写的好！</P>

空水瓶 发表于 2008-10-30 11:01

<P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4><STRONG><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: " Roman?? New ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; Times>“伊人</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"> </SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: " Roman?? New ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; Times>秋风秋雨的清晨空气清新</SPAN><SPAN lang=EN-US style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-com:office:office" /><o:p></o:p></SPAN></STRONG></FONT></P><P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4><STRONG><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: " Roman?? New ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; Times>快来啊</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"> </SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: " Roman?? New ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; Times>河水已变得清澈透明……</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"> ”</SPAN></STRONG></FONT></P><P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4><STRONG><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"></SPAN></STRONG></FONT>&nbsp;</P><P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4><STRONG><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"></SPAN></STRONG></FONT>&nbsp;</P><P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><STRONG><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><FONT size=6>&nbsp;&nbsp; 这样的美景、清水醉了冬泳人</FONT></SPAN></STRONG></P><P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4><STRONG><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><SPAN lang=EN-US><o:p></o:p></SPAN></SPAN></STRONG></FONT>&nbsp;</P>

哈哈哈 发表于 2008-10-30 16:05

<FONT size=6>赵老师的诗写得太好了。应该属于写实主义兼浪漫派诗人。</FONT>

嘉州阳光 发表于 2008-11-2 21:36

“哈哈哈”的点评算是“点到位”了。
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